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Something quite non-fictional.
Something experimental.
Something someone has gone through... and still haunts him.
Something I know of him, that makes himself a special somebody...

But I'm only one of those who builds dreams
That are more likely to tumble.

Preview pic taken from [link]
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I took about an hour to do this... and it's not that long a period of time...
No reference to dictionary or anything... I don't want it polished, i want it to be selfishly mine.

Would probably dedicate this to Aidan who would be celebrating his birthday.. in time to come :)
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Excellent ending :nod: very strong.

I like the casual narration. It feels very personal. Like your friend is telling you a story... which lets you sorta relax and get into it.

Some of the rhyming is really good and some of it breaks the flow a little, but most of it is good.

The lines in parentheses really add to it as well. Focal points almost summarizing the poem.

Anyway, nice work :clap:

:highfive: